Question:
What do you think of this poem?
Life's Inconsistencies
Happiness always lasts temporarily
and it's consistency is controlled arbitrarily
All hopes and dreams are glass waiting to be shattered
after they are your body and mind are left tattered
Happiness is inconsistent
but the sorrows in life are ever persitent
It's better to grow up and face the strife
then to be naive and think there's true happiness in life
Everyone should accept honesty
rather then ending up living in misery
People don't understand this philosophy
they would if they knew my life story
Happiness makes everything bright
but once it fades you wonder who turned out the light?
After you crash in the dark from the heights of happiness
that's when you'll realize your foolishness
You will see that I was right
then you will learn to stay out of the light.
I don't write good poems I know but I want to know just how bad it is so I can decide who can see it or if it should be burned.
Additional Details6 months ago
Don't Be overly critical, be honest not abusive
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
poems came from individual feeling
anywhere it comes ..from spiritual feeling..or movement feeling
the point of a poems is ....
there's no rules that this is good or this 1 is not good....
most important of poems that the writer can freely put words on a paper and feels what's on mind ...
if you can freely put words and mind in a pieces paper
then it makes good poems ...it'll sound nice n worthy
good luck....