Be honest........like or hate,be brutally truthful please ?

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I was getting bored and wrote this!.!.!. I'm in 9th grade!.!.!.just kinda dipping into poetry I guess you could say!.!.

Years of fears,
And tears I see,
The painful rembrance,
Hidden deep inside of me,

A perfect life,
Many may see,
But really a living tragedy,
Surviving on nothing but faith,

How long will it take,
For dawn to break,
For the sun to rise,
And brighten my year,
For sorrows to melt away,
As the warmth shine upon my face,

Tears no more,
And fearless I stand,
No longer afraid to fall,
But ready to finally stand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

For ninth grade, it's acceptable!. It's entirely too forced!. Too much thought into the rhyme scheme!. If the rhyme or meter doesn't come naturally, please don't use it!. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow no one could hate this its beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

its wonderful!

um i'm 24 years old, please read my poem again and have all your contacts read it!. i wan't as many people as possible to read it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To me, it seems like regular angsty teen poetry!. Pretty good though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com