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I am a 16 year old guy and this is how I express myself!. :)


Here is a haiku, they don't ever really sound good though:
Soft, cooling breezes
Flow along the fields and hills
Calming the whole world

This is the second one that I wrote, It's called Why!?
You make all these promises
But then go and break them
You demand your respect
But don't ever give it
You say I'm your son
But don't treat me as such
You give your love to him
But don't give any to me
You gave birth young
But didn't want me at all
You tell me you love me
But then you neglect me
I will give you my love
All I want is love back


Please comment, I want to know what you think:) Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
its beautiful <3Www@QuestionHome@Com

i get what you're trying to do, and i think you've done quite a good job with it but i feel like it might need a lil more work because at the moment it feels like its a sort of baby stage you know, requiring a lil more growing up :P
other than that, its great :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds like you are a very lonely and neglected person !.Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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