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Question: Did I go too far with the monkey part!?
This makes perfect sense to me!.
But I have a tendency to be a little too vague (and not artistically so) when I write!. Any ideas!?
It's safe outside they say
For those of you who don't know
It's been all over the television!.
A crack in the glass of my optimism
Keeps it forever half !.!.!. not full
To avoid a cliche!.
The monkeys are still arguing
Over the bananas and I can't
Seem to get a slice in the meantime!.
Racing cars with windows open
Scream at me to slow down
But when I stop - it's for too long!.
I go outside because they say
but realize they lied and i forgot
my boots don't protect me from bullshit!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Those monkeys are never satisfied!.
And never trust anything you "hear"
Nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Not really, it didn't make 'clear' sense, however from the feel of this, it's supposed to be mulled over, and you should make what you want from it!. The only thing I don't like is the last line!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It fits right in!.
Outside
Glass
Moneys
Cars
Outside
Wickid rhythm btw!
I like the money part because it made me smile!.!.!.saved me from the overwhelming feeling of doom, fear, helplessness and despair!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This was wonderful, I rather enjoyed it!.
The monkeys just won't stop jumping on the bed!.
Cheers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ooh--ooh ah-ah!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is good, with the correct measure of Monkey, I think!.Www@QuestionHome@Com