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Question: Jungle of modern days!?
This one is titled: Jungle
(Any criticism is good as long as you explain!.)
In the overgrown urban jungle I am
running from the delirious mad man
-With a crazy wild look in his eye
upon the streets, I stumble, I cry
betwixt the labyrinth of buildings I flee
evading the prowler, hoping I he can't see
sprinting onward toward inadequate light
desperately discerning for anyone in sight
no individual to be strolling along
an aghast feeling, harrowing and strong
spinning in rage I turn to face
whomever it is keeping pace
opening my eyes, I look to see
it's my shadow who's chasing meWww@QuestionHome@Com
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very good snow!. nice twist at the end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
haha!. that was funny!. i felt like i was running with you!. just as you think it's gonna lash out and eat you, you realise!.!. oh wiat, it was just my shaddow!.!.!. LOVED IT
It had a sort of!.!.!.!.!. exciting, powerful, feared way about it that really pulled me in!.
that was just awesome!. best poem i have read today!
well done!.
i do hope you write as your job as you sure do have a nack for it!.
xox jen xoxWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think the overall idea is very clever!. You just need to change either some of the adjectives to some of the words, like aghast really doesn't go well, or change some of the sentence structures!. I really think this is a cute poem!. Please keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com