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Question: Is this a good piece of writing!?
I am 14, so keep into consideration I find it difficult to completely grasp the loss of life I talk about in this poem!.
Of languid festivities
and a humans rush,
Breaks dawn a new wishful life,
Seeking timid pleasures
Thoughts with a rush
and a mind to push through
Seeing death before livid and
long gone before truth
Of flowing dreams, ill torn sleeves
New becomes old in a life of needs
A life conceived before first sheer thought of existing
comes shining through
A maze of appetites to wander through
for one last taste
It's too far away for time to be reaching me yet
One more hour, I plea!
After a life of listening in
noises tend to credit the spaces
your mind has once seen
Accustomed to feeling young
the girl ran wildly to previous seen places
To prevent a future of her past
and old thoughts growing numb!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it a lot
Your choices of such extraordinary descriptive words, makes this a very mature poem for me!.!.
As a reader I felt the deep wounds,the emotions and the anguish!.!.!.!.
Good on you!.!. keep up the good work!.
Age has nothing to do with writing good poetry!.
You have to stand out there and make your mark!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow, pretty deep for a 14 year old, hell that's deep for an 80 year old!. You should be careful posting your art on here, someone will steal it and have it published, it's pretty awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Not bad!. Keep practicing, and you'll be just like me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it sounds great!
Favorite line: "New becomes old in a life of needs"Www@QuestionHome@Com
shi t, i cried!. amazing for 14!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that isnt good
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it is pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com