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Question: My poem!.!.!.ur opinion!?
another reposted poem!.!.!.i posted this one on here a long time ago!.!.!.but different ppl get on and i like to hear opinions both good and bad!.!.!.!.some people though it was about sex for some reason!.!.idk but just to make it clear!.!.!.it's not!.!.!.!.and im not emo!.!.!.someone thought that too lol i kinda see why tho!.!.!.if you like it you should read my other poems
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.swallowed whole by the darkness
the same darkness i once hid in
tempted by the love
the one that has been forbidden
telling lies to keep the peace
when pieces fall apart
losing touch with sanity
running from the start
looking for all of mine
in this pile of shattered dreams
forgetting why i came here
deafened by the screams
pick me up and wipe my tears
guide me towards the light
help me fight these shadows
help me survive the night
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Excellent expression!. Sounds like someone who just wants to live quietly suddenly found themselves confused and overcome, looking for hope beyond the situation!. This could be written by someone who has been deeply hurt, traumatized by a natural event [like Hurricane Ike] or simply woke up one morning wondering how everything turned out so bad!.
I give it two thumbs up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love the word choice, and the sentences are very strong and powerful, but i don't feel like its flowing too well!. It's a beautiful poem, and i love the theme, it just needs some editing to help it flow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
rlly nice :)
lolz some people thought it was about sex XDD! maybe - 'swallowed whole by the darkness' gave them *cough cough* interesssting thoughts; xPWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think that that is very nice and VERY expressive! I love that you are a great poem writer!.good job if you were in my class then i would give you an a++Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am not one to judge but I think you would be better off writing poetry that does not rhythm!. I thought it was a bit boring, although I see a lot of talent in your writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!.
it flows really well, and you have an established rhyme pattern!.
Plus, it makes sense!.
good job :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think its a sexy poem and i would hug it if it was physically possible
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Desciptive!. I have pictures in my head as I read it!.
its good!. :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
it is very good and descriptive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's a good poem about despair!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
N1Www@QuestionHome@Com
Too EMOWww@QuestionHome@Com
oh wow, ur pretty good at poems, do u or did u ever take journalism!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
it!.!.!.doesnt make sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
good but scary lolWww@QuestionHome@Com
love thisWww@QuestionHome@Com
I likey!.
its a bit emo!.
but iys good!.
its dark!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
that was really good!. very!.!.!. deepWww@QuestionHome@Com