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Question: Kind of a dark poem, What do you think!?
I can't believe I'm here again!.
Back to that feeling!.
That's oh so familiar!.
I wish it would go away!.
I try to control it!.
Recognize it when I can!.
Hoping for it to stop!.
But nothing works!.
That feeling of lose!.
That I'm losing control!.
Like everything is falling!.
Even me!.
Things get better!.
Yea, than always worse!.
I can't take it anymore!.
I'm going crazy!.
Just shut up Jalana!
Things will be fine!.
Stop thinking this way!.
None of this is true!.
What lies I tell myself!.
Why can't things ever work out!?
I must be forgotten!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sounds like you are struggling with something at this point!. Am I right!?
Sounds like you need to start listening to your heart and realizing the truth about yourself!. Sometimes the mind is not always correct because sometimes our thoughts are distorted even though we don't believe it!. That's when you have to listen to that inner voice!. Your heart!. Your soul!.
It's very beautiful Jalana!. I really like it!. I write dark poems as well!. Darker than this even!. Keep going on writing poems!. You do very well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
If you want to express these feelings, try to do so in a more interesting
way!. The way it's presented is no different than if you'd written these
things in a diary!. Use your imagination to conjur up words that evoke
imagry, sight, sound, smell or sense of place, whether emotional
or geographical!. Condense, condense, condense!.!.until you're left
with just a backbone of words that all have weight unto themselves!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think poetry is a good way of expressing yourself!. Try using assonance, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhythm, symbolism, irony, metaphor and simile to make your poetry better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats pretty good acctually!.
read mine http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It doesn't really have a poetic stream of consciousness!. What's with all the periods!? Poems are split up into lines and stanzas but they usually make sense grammatically!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A little dark but I like it!. Trust it is not autobiographical although we all have those moments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is really original!. good workWww@QuestionHome@Com
GREAT POEM! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!?
Little dark but nice ring to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Err!.!.!. I guess I've seen worse!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its strange but I kinda like it So does that make me strange too!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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wow! i like it, im kind of going through a depressed moment right now and i can really relate to it!.!.
great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really like it though!.
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i give it an 8Www@QuestionHome@Com
fuckin great!.!.!. read mine and comment will ya here:
Wish
You walk over to the counter
You hear music
It sounds like a grand orchestra
You can't help but look for revenge
You want to punish them
You want them to be miserable
You pick up the cold blade
The music gets louder
You see your reflection
You smile at the thought of ending it all
The blade glides over you bare flesh
It sends shivers of excitement up your spine
You push firmly
Violins explode with sound as the skin breaks
A smooth crimson substance flows out
Blood…
You smile at the pain
You feel warm inside
Death is coming quickly
You write a note
Saying how much you were hated
You were an outcast
No matter what you did
It was never enough
You were never enough
…
You wake up
It was a dream
…
…
But you wish wasn't
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