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Question: What Do You think of my poem!? Any ideas for names!?
Children of the rainbow
Praying to the skies
Washing in the morning dew
The sunshine in their eyes
Free and free to love, to learn
To dance and sing and shout
Opposing only cruelty
They hardly hang about
The cancer now is spreading
It's spreading to the streets
Warn the children not to trust
Anyone they meet
Now the dance is slowing down
The cold is setting in
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I liked your first three stanzas!. The fourth seems incomplete or I am not getting the idea!. I took the liberty of providing some edit ideas for you to consider!. Overall, very nice!. Keep at it!.
Children of the rainbow
Praying to the skies
Washing in morning dew
sunshine in their eyes
Free and free to love, to learn
To dance and sing and shout
Opposing only cruelty
They hardly hang about
cancer now is spreading
spreading to the streets
Warn the children not to trust
Anyone they may meet
Now the dance is slowing down,
the cold, setting in
You can search for what you need
In the discount bin
Www@QuestionHome@Com
omg thats cool and for the title life is just a burn or fast to slow, slowing down, geting darker geting lighter
stuff like that but yes your poem is great and could you please awnser mine i would be very greatful http://nz!.answers!.yahoo!.com/question/ind!.!.!.
oh and don't lisen to those people your poem is great and if you like sometime i could show you some of mine but there not that good i just wrote them when i was board but yours is great and a marvous poem :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
you can call it 'shitty *** poem' or **** for short!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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but really, at least try improving the rhythm !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have nothing to say !.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com