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Am I in an act of play,
did the clapper board come down
as I looked away!?
I see the crowd,
their eyes embedded,
is this the nightmare,
that I've dreaded!?
Standing alone,
the spot light screaming,
I hope to God
I am just dreaming!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this poem, is absolutely beautiful, structures perfect!. rhyme scheme is good!. first verse could use that last line, but it doesn't matter!. its very very good!. ignore the first guy that commented this!. he's a douche!.
great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
But as the big curtain comes down,I can see a patron frown, as if I were in a trance,not a dance!. Oh yes,I feel the heat,if I beat the drum,Where are you from,said the cumber bum!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
Cool, I like it!. Where is the rest!?
Def!. think you got a nack!.!.!.nateral ability!. I am a writter, and do alot of poetty myself!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
It pretty good!. The key to real good poetry is passion!. This almost sounds forced or like your bored!. Think to yourself would this be interesting to me if I read it!? But all in all not bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I can write better poems than that!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
Poetry is hard to write :)
Sounds good Www@QuestionHome@Com
woahh!
this is really good!
did you write this!?!
i love this!Www@QuestionHome@Com
the second stanza is pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
nice i loved it!!!!!!!! cool!!!!!!!!! : )Www@QuestionHome@Com