they're a secret amongst the blue sky, oh my love whare my bow in your hair, and let our hearts become as sticky as vanilla honey!. >>>>---wew----> diaryWww@QuestionHome@Com
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Er, well I'm just gonna think you want help re-phrasing it / making spelling and grammatical corrections!? If that's the case, here's the revised version: ''Blue, blue; my rainbows are blue!. But although there, they are a secret amongst the blue sky!. Oh my love, wear my bow in your hair, and let our hearts become as sticky as vanilla honey!." I think it's a really pretty poem, but you made a huge leap from describing rainbows to your love, so I'm guessing the rainbows symbolize your love; it's secretive!? If that's the case, then maybe add something like 'as is my everlasting desire' right after the fourth line!. Hope I could be of help!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |