A free-verse poem, quasi-erotic. Do you like it?

Question:Ode to Amy (in freeverse)

Dine?
Of couse I shall!
A taste only,
Perhaps with a dessert wine?
A blush, I think
Something pink
and sweet to drink.
Perhaps more than a taste?
I thirst also.
It's practically an ache.
I'd fain leave such a dish.
Wet tongue tips, moistens
them, by licking lips.
And the glass is full.
Perhaps just a sip?
That should hit the spot.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Ode to Amy (in freeverse)

Dine?
Of couse I shall!
A taste only,
Perhaps with a dessert wine?
A blush, I think
Something pink
and sweet to drink.
Perhaps more than a taste?
I thirst also.
It's practically an ache.
I'd fain leave such a dish.
Wet tongue tips, moistens
them, by licking lips.
And the glass is full.
Perhaps just a sip?
That should hit the spot.

Alright. Wow...

Is it getting hot in here?

Seriously, that was...WHEW!

yea it sounds pretty good, its about food and a lover rite?

not free verse and its kinda crappy. that was my nieces opinion

Well done...

Your tryin to hard.

is this about your favourite ICCCEEE CREAM.right na.now why waiting go n have.

Wow, I think it's really good! Sort of dainty and sweet. I like the rhymes scattered through. They really add an... I-don't-know-what to the poem, if you catch my meaning.

The only thing I don't like is the last line - it's a little jarring with the quaintness of the rest of the poem.

Very, very, expressive!!!!! You and 'Buried Alive'... wow! Excellent!

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