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Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> Thoughts on my poem, 'Jealousy'?Question: Thoughts on my poem, 'Jealousy'?In a raging storm of jealousy and hate Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: That is very good. I really like it. If I may offer a suggestion, though. The middle paragraph, the 2nd and 3rd lines kind of run together. You have established a good rythem throughout the whole poem, but those two lines don't really follow it. You may get away with changing the word Of, to In your past.... or Put her in your past somewhere........ Just a suggestion, though. It is very good. Stevo |