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Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> Opinions on my poem, 'My Killer, My Healer'?Question: Opinions on my poem, 'My Killer, My Healer'?I was walking around almost dead Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: extraordinary!! I've read it four times now, and each time I've discovered something new, different. PEOPLE: poems MUST be read more than once, or you don't get the flow! good poems have meaning that hides between the lines, and to understand a writer's process, you have to absorb a poem. that requires a re-read, and another, and another in some cases. meter and rhyme and length of line are all subject to a writer's meaning. the second stanza begins with a very short line: it's Gupil's intention here (or so I see it) to set it apart and create space. "Struggling not to get killed." on its own without what comes before or after, it's an especially dramatic line. take it in before moving on, like a subtitle thrown in from nowhere. it's important--it's set apart. the following line also disrupts flow: who is this "you"? is it the writer, or the "you" of the other lines? or is it neither, just a generic "you"? the narrator makes no other reference to what she might do to the "you," but always what "you" is doing to "I"--except that "I" loves "you." (sometimes I amaze myself, and it's only caffeine) this poem is utterly fantastic, and only those who are confined with their own thoughts of "what a poem should be" will find it to be otherwise. if I could, I'd give me to you so that I might experience what you went through. is there a better way to say "thanks"? you are brilliant! |