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Tailor shop of
reputation Divine,
she walked into
with many complaints,
wearing dress of
magnificent design!.
"It doesn't fit right,
I find!.
It's too tight here
and wrinkles there,
I tug on it all
day long!.
It wears me
rather than me
wearing it!. Please,
can you alter my
mind and my steps!?
This dress, custom made
by the Master's hand,
is the only one
I shall ever have!.
I want to wear it well!."
Her heart was right,
alterations were made,
she walked in Beauty
again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sometimes life seems to hang on us all like a frumpy old piece of flour sack, but with a change in outlook, it can fit like a perfectly tailored suit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I read this one and then read through the other answers!. Went to the song Mek referred to and listened to it and then read your poem again!.
I am not sure about that!.
What I see is a woman going through life and when she gets to the age of understanding things, sees the wrinkles forming and wants to straighten them out--wrinkles in her soul--then, with ponderance and maybe even prayer 'sees the light' so to speak--maybe a life altering incident causes this--then she changes and sees more beauty around her and thus sees beauty in herself!.
Maybe I am over thinking your intent!.
Beauty resides in you, Ma!. Keep writing beauty to share!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is one of the best poems I think you've written!. Although I am not so sure Bluebell missed the mark with "birthday suit", it seems that a birthday suit could well be a simile to life, but this concept constrasts with the idea of a dress being a cover of our shame!. There are so many angles to the idea thazt can be followed though after this poem, but alas that is why there is poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good poem Ma!.!.It makes you stop and think!.Its not the dress but the inner self that makes you beautiful!. Dont matter if there is wrinkles in our life but its up to us to iron them out!. Once you find that out you can hold your head up high no matter what the clothing u are wearing!. Its called pride and vanity!.I loved it!.!. kisses and hugs to u!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I understand the dress of Life, currently taking it in to the Divine Maker for repairing a tear right over the heart, also removing some bloodstains!. This poem is a living encouragement!. Thank you, Ma!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this reminds me of the song!.!.!.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.fake plastic trees by radiohead!.!.!.
http://www!.youtube!.com/watch!?v=TBRdet5Eh!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
She walks in beauty like the night!.!.!.
Alterations made, her heart is right!.
http://au!.youtube!.com/watch!?v=ZtOAf7MaOZ!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Fascinating poem!. Well written, Ma!.
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love it - I wanted to know who the tailor was, then I realized it didn't matter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Great poem and even better news!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Isn't it great if we can walk in beauty again!? Lovely poem, love it!.!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Entertaining answers, ma, to your poem of life!. Don't we all see ourselves the way we want the world to see us!? Plastic trees and all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ma I loved this! We could all use a few alterations!. Wonder how my fit is!? Sometimes seems a bit stiff!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh if only!.!.!.but then I think!.!.!.I wouldn't change a thing!. Very thought-provoking write Ma!. Good one!Www@QuestionHome@Com
God has cleansed her soul!.!.!. or as you put it her garments!. Great read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
We should all be happy with our birthday suit, even when it wrinkles!.
Once again, encouragement for women!.x!.
My bad!. I thought I might not be getting your meaning correctly but it did make me think of being unhappy with my body as I age!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Great one, Ma!Www@QuestionHome@Com
You do good work Find a publisherWww@QuestionHome@Com
I know very well of this plight!.
dress and redress!.
AmenWww@QuestionHome@Com