We see the poppies
On our hearts
Remembering the day
Soldiers fought,
Dying for us
With fearless courage
Never defeated
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On our hearts Remembering the day Soldiers fought, Dying for us With fearless courage Never defeated is this good!? if not how can I fix it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: We see the poppies on their hearts at second glance, the missing body parts Imaginings the days and dark nights the soldiers, so long they fought dying alone in a strange land freedom for their lives they brought!. There is always fear, but fear with Courage Always a time of defeat, but never completely beat!. The war rages on but some battles are never over!.Www@QuestionHome@Com it's a nice and the point of it is clear, but you mite want to think of a substitute word for poppies!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Maybe start with these lines "With fearless courage Never defeated" They seem a bit redundant and plain!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Yes but No iiff so0metiime yo0u do0nt riite eno0ugh peo0ple wo0nt get the po0etryWww@QuestionHome@Com It's okay, just a bit short!. Doesn't really excite me when reading it!. Sorry!. lol!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |