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There are stories about young lovers
They don’t always come true
Stories of lovers throughout the world
All of them stories, but not all fiction
For a girl met a boy
They were meant for each other
Almost to good to be true
They fell in love, right out of a story
There are stories about young lovers
Here is proof they can come true
He stayed up late writing her poems
They’d talk for hours on the phone
She’d stare at him wanting forever
5 minutes apart they’d miss each other
There’s is a song just perfect for them
He loves the smell of her hair
Holding her closely, feeling safe in his arms
Theirs is a love to last forever
Boys and girls this is more then a story
One day there’s a happily end
That boy has found his happy forever
A boy and a girl more then a story
This is the truth none of it fiction
It’s a love story, their hearts addictionWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think it was very good, i like the story element and how u think it doesn't rhyme at all until the next versus when it links in with the one before!! very good hun, sounds lush x
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I suggest that you cull the "story, stories", "lovers, lover, love" from the poem to come up with a svelte version!. You have one point to make; one couple that stands out!. Let the others be background chatter, and take the most difficult step of all -- editing!.
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Hey that is good work, you should write more!
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