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Question: CHECK THIS OUT!!! PLEASE!?
OKAY I WAS IN THIS KINDA LIKE A POETRY CLASS AND WE TRIED GOING THROUGH NEWS PAPERS PICKING OUT WORDS OR PHRASES WHATEVER U LIKED AND MAKE A POEM OUT OF IT!. THIS IS MINE DO YOU LIKE IT!?
The optimistic suspects death to return,
Then the problems began,
Rage, despair it doesn't stop there
We spent the day
Wasting away
Heavily loved
I feel the pain from above
Most hated and shamed
I'm tired ot this game
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it!.
Seriously this is by far the best poem I've seen posted on here!. Usually I offer constructive criticism, because frankly most of the poems really need some work!.
But this one is great!.
I think it says a lot about people that the best poem I've seen is one made of bits from the newspaper!.
Most people put way too much of their ego into their poetry, and overthink it!. This poem is refreshing in that you just chose the words that spoke to you and put them together!.
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It's alright - I'd use better, more descriptive words if I were you!.
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