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Question: Do you like my poem!. Please don't rash me!?
Upon a moonlit star:
A velvatine rose has the Hindsight,
To tell of true lovers bewitched
And if your heart is chosen wisely,
Then in true love you'll be ritch
The fairies dance in the Winter Nights,
To meet this velvatine rose
And a sun as might kings halls,
Will lighten upon your throne
Now, as luck should tell,
A stocky young lad, was collecting stardust this night,
And a pretty young girl from kingdom,
Was given a very nice fright
And as in that very same moment,
When this boy, and this girl hit a star
Did a velvatine rose in the starlight,
Predict of lovers afar
He said, that true lovers meeting,
As every man knew in that time
"And so we meet pon a moonlit star,
and like a shot in the dark, I love you"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WOW! I really enjoyed reading this and liked the fairy tale manner that you wrote it in!. It is an easy read and I like the steady flow and construction!. At first it seems quite light hearted yet it has a beautiful meaning behind it!.
Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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it's all a bit cheesy for my liking
"A stocky young lad, was collecting stardust this night"
that sentence is way too long and doesn't fit the rest of the poem
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that is amazing! i wish i could write something like this! I don't exactly have the patience though!. lol!. But i think it's very well written!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Guess you will be pulled up on spelling but who cares, simply beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com
you may want to spell check!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
there are a few spelling mistakes but apart from that it's great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its a pretty good poem but there is a lot of misspellings in it
good job!.!.!.=]Www@QuestionHome@Com
Not bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com