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Question: Care to critique my poem!?
I get a tingling sensation
Whenever I vacation
My body next to yours
We have so much fun indoors
There’s no reason to go outside
Just a quick glance
At your backside
Causes me to tear off your pants
And put you in a trance
Of incredible romance
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hahhaahaa it's cute in that sexual kind of way lmfao!.
it starts off kinda juvenile though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
To be honest, it's very sweet, but I think that you could continue and add a few more stanzas to explore some of the poem's theme a little further!. But it's up to you,obviously!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
whenever I vacation!? Eh, i guess you can keep it in there,!.!.!.
Everything else!!! beautiful! (great ryhming by the wayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Ha That's A Nice Poem did you have anybody certain on your mind cause you should probley recite it to them!.Www@QuestionHome@Com