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Position:Home>Poetry> What if you had too much?Question: What if you had too much!? Dead Sky In Mourning Rotting here inside my head So tired of living in dread Greener grass or so they said Loading up the last of the lead I never was my own boss Now all of my dreams lost Again I can’t afford the cost No more coins left to toss Tick tock sitting with my Glock Old guy last one on the block Crippled chair unable to rock Ironside stuck to the dock I’m so tired of sailing Hurting so bones are wailing Arms broken and flailing Sinking fast tired of bailing Once again I’m going down Go away please let me drown Lost everything I have found My silence is the only sound See the gray in my hair I’ve had it up to there No one with whom to share Losing all my will to care No longer to be the yo-yo This is my final solo Tighten up on my bolo You can’t save me oh no Don’t tell me it’s madness You can’t feel my sadness I’ve failed my last test I’ll clean up my own mess As the moment starts to near Downwind again I steer In darkness I see so clear Nothing left to those I held dear Looking down with upturned eye Waking up to my last red sky Gave it all my very best try No more tears will I have to cry I’m ready to die ?rad111504 That was then!.!.!.I'm here now!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am glad you got that off your chest!. Darkness can grip with a hold that is numbing and stifling!. The one thing we can always take with us is that everyone is on a similar track, although some may seem more 'elevated!.' Tears are steam pressure valves!. Use them!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Fantastic, I really liked this poem, and I have felt the same way--It has a great amount of emotion I have one up, drop me a line sometimes **Shame people have such an aversion to dark poetry, there is beauty in everything and it is a shame to limit ones selfWww@QuestionHome@Com Deep inner feeling expressed, still we do survive, miracles do exist!. alive through dark,to light!. "I never was my own boss!." Are any of us truly our own boss!? This is a good bottom to hit, if we choose to rise, thank God you did! or we would have missed reading, your human heart, so well expressed!. Kudos Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm so glad those days are gone! I don't care for "dark" poetry, but I wanted to say you did a good job with that one!. Good morning, friend!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Good poem, but I rather not read stuff like this!. I just pulled through another cycle of depression!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm so glad you made it to today!.!.!.none of us ever knows our worth to another, whether in this virtual world or in our everyday real world!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Perfect!Www@QuestionHome@Com that was absolutely amazing!.!.!. it was so powerful!. great jobWww@QuestionHome@Com EDIT: Good that the dark days were then!Www@QuestionHome@Com DAMN! that is some powerful stuff!.!.!. you should try to publish it!.!.!. you had me in near tears!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Too much is worth it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com OK I'll be the one to say it!.!.!.!.!.way too much Dark Prince in this!. (bless his memory) Be aware Hydropro there are youngsters and strugglers who are still in the cyclonic spin of self doubt and self damage!. (not I) we as poets need to measure our words (although spoken in truth and shared with guts) so it doesn't get misinterpreted (desparate people may not read the last line) As a journey to the edge it is a very powerful poem!. I am so glad you are here!. :-) sorry to be a killjoy!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |