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Position:Home>Poetry> Would you care to comment? Just some words I wrote...Question: Would you care to comment!? Just some words I wrote!.!.!. Defenseless There are times When time stops Your guard drops And you're alone Prone to live To give!.!.!.yet Somehow given Still driven to live Your life as it is Exchanging notes Boarding boats Sailing to new ports Last resorts of beauty He writes his duty Free from the ashes Sitting in line Waiting Wanting More rad080508Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I think it punches plenty good!.!.!."times when time!.!.!."Www@QuestionHome@Com I really enjoyed that sentiment!. Feels as though it might be from or for military personnel!. Could just be the current political environment making me think that way!. also, enjoyed the phrasing, not the standard ABAB rhyming pattern!. Gave it the right punch!. I bet this would be beautiful spoken with the right music behind it!. Thank you for sharing!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Life in pause, We are always looking for another door to open, to go around one more corner, to find!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. more then another poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com On a new adventure - time waiting for the next connection - to continue on your journey ?Www@QuestionHome@Com To me the second stanza could use some attention to flow!. The message though comes through!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Interesting to ponder your words!. Does this not happen to all of us from time to time!? Belief that it does!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Wow, way to go! Interesting!Www@QuestionHome@Com |