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Question: Do you have any suggestions for me, my friends!?

you lie upon your plushing down little cradle
rocked with adoration
your will tends towards overkill
to fill the lives of slaves to fashion
distaste in distilled compliments
sit down at ends to dine with you
and drown in lavishly flowing liquor
complaints instilled with after-dinner mints
waste so much more than time
because your soul is in a vacuum
until the day they find you dead
on the floor of a 5-star hotel bathroomWww@QuestionHome@Com

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I love this poem and words as these words cut to the bone' but people like these in the poem' should be cut down to the bone as they stick their noses up At me' as i ask for the time and look at people that do not have not much as they are the maggots of the world!.Only In their warped eyes as if they looked into the mirror' they would see the true maggots of society I'm sure!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I dig it!.!.!.pretty hardcore!. Best line was "distaste in distilled compliments"!. Gotta love alliteration! I think it's perfectly fine the way it is!. Just always remember: poetry is subjective and relative!. I may like it, and 4 others will say it's crap!. All that matters is if you dig it and like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

why dead at last sentence
you change it please
excellent poemWww@QuestionHome@Com