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Question: Forgotten love: A new poem for you to critque if you please!?
“Forgotten love”

Once of a time
In a place long forgotten
A silent announcement
Of love was declared

It was deafening to those
Who’s lives were made better
But fell short of those
Whom mattered the most

Words can change lives
But actions speak louder
With our tongue we make sense
Of a true love divide

Why is it we seek
Those willing to listen
But don’t talk to the one
We profess to adore

Is there a plan
Of predestination
Believing in fate
Are we praying for more

A silent protest
For all to be forgiven
A silent conquest
At the conscious request

To show that the love
Will never be forgotten
To pay attention to details
Of our love found once more

Silver Tongue

(Copyright ? Geoffrey Brett - 20/07/2008)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is extremely deep!. I can't believe how talented you are!. I know what it means, and I am not at all confused!. Most poems make me slightly confused and I have to read it over again, but yours I want to read it over just to feel the emotion and understand your thoughts--not once, but a thousand times more!. Great vocabulary and lovely topic, and we all can relate to this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Excellent poem, well executed! The fourth stanza speaks volumes, and was my favourite!.!.!.

Whilst communication is the key, we can all relate to a "forgotten or lost love"!.!.!.


very good but I would change once of a time to once upon a time because what you wrote doesn′t make sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are absolutely right with the words you used! Great one again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

love it! goosebumpsWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow that is deep i love it dont change it a bit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com