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Question: Poem!?good!?
a red praying mantis
with a blade wind dance
putting green aphids
into a slumber tranceWww@QuestionHome@Com

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I like the poem
for some reason
I am thinking of magic
or hypnosis because of the
red praying mantis
putting green aphids
into a slumber trance!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is quite good!. I like the evocative nature of images!. I don't know why a praying mantis would be red, but I like that it is!. The wind dance is interesting too!. The contrast with the red and the green is striking as well!. The only thing I would drop is the end rhyme, which kind of blows it up at the end!.

Otherwise, a fun little piece!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your short poem
I do not detest
It is not the worst
But it is not the best!.

It lacks an ending
And it lacks a start
So add a bit more
To that middle part!.

Your poem seems broken
But you need not a nurse
Just more time and imagentation
To fix your broken verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i don't think it's bad at all!. it's short, and i'm not really into bugs, but you have good word choice and the rhyme makes sense!. also, the topic is interesting, whether you are into bugs or not! it's a nice break from all the love and sad poems people write!Www@QuestionHome@Com

poem!. bad!.
clarity!. worse!.
Learn to make sense
before verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like the preparation for a great feast!. Great visual!. Thanks ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

i hope this isnt a hiku or tanka cuz its wrong and if its not its still badWww@QuestionHome@Com

really badWww@QuestionHome@Com


ummm!. it's pretty bad, man!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

poem badWww@QuestionHome@Com