Snow falls silently!.
The presents are opening!.
It is Christmas time!.
i wrote this wen i was younger
tell me if its good
im planning to do something with it for christmas ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
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The presents are opening!. It is Christmas time!. i wrote this wen i was younger tell me if its good im planning to do something with it for christmas ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: it's cute ^_^ i like it!. [to the guy at the bottom Vlad something:] it's her poem, she wrote it and she can do whatever she wants with it!. i personally think the "snow falls silently" is better in a more simple way and blends well w/ the rest of the haiku!. if you want to keep your "snow comes in silence" then make your own haiku!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Well, I think it is okay, but to improve the flow, I think you should omit the end stopping in this poem!. Because a haiku suppose to have a unified and complete thought!. Plus, I think you should just describe the snow alone in this haiku in order to stay within the nature theme!. Nevertheless, it is a good start!. :]Www@QuestionHome@Com The point of a haiku is to say something big, in something small, instead of presents, try something with family, because we all know that xmas shouldn't be about presents!. right!? I sure hope so!. Stay Strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Haiku, 5 sylables, 7 then five!. You have three complete sentences!. Try three images in one sentence!. The whole thing must stand as a single vision!. Snow was heavenly as gifts were gladly opened to mind us of Christ!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Its a good poem!. Though if yu want to read to someone then you should add and take off something For enstice: Snow falls silently Change it to: Snow comes, in silenceWww@QuestionHome@Com in my opinion it was okay!.!.!.its not bad!.!.!.!. but it could still use improvement!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |