My Life Check it please =)?

Question: My Life Check it please =)!?

my life seem to loose color
i don't know why
i simply wanna fly
looking at the grey sky
i realize
i will never fly
i lost my wings
i lost my way
i wont be the same
this is awful
i simply don't know why
i'm gonna cry
i just wanna fly
but is imposible now
i found my wings
they are black and broken now
and i know
i will never flyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

You maid Ur point !.!. I 'm not gonna call it a poem , but I enjoy reading it !.!. The writer even as depressed he/she didn't loose his/her sense of humor!. Keep on writing!.!. U 'v got something there clicking !.!. almost in synchronization !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry, but I didn't care for it much!. It seemed sloppily rhymed and lacked depth and meaning in my opinion!. However, on a possitive note, I like your screenname :) Sweeney Todd was an awesome movie except out of all of my friedns and family I was the only one who liked it :( no one shares my taste in offbeat films xD
Good luck writing :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It sucks!. Stop feeling sorry for yourself!.

Your life is 100 times better than some GI stuck in Afghanistan on the front lines who left his wife and newborn kid on the other side of the world!. He's not sure why he's there!. He has almost no comforts of home and can't wait until he can return!.

Get over it!. Your life is fine!. Make something of it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your wings will mend
and you will fly
again and again
It only takes time
to find the blue sky
and help you shine
like you once did fine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ehhh!? To much rhyming off of the same word!. Try to mix it up a little!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

oh that is very good when ever you make more poems or what ever tell me ok
email me anytime my email is mystery1426@yahoo!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com