Another Song I wrote: "The Damned" Any good for my 2nd song?

Question:This is living these are the dead, I see them walking in my head.
Try to remember what I've said, their brains are filled with lead.
This could be good change for us? The end of greed, power, and lust.
Listen closely to what I say, all these things won't go away.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I kill them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

Judgement day, appealing to me. When it comes, I'll be free!
No more hate, in the cree. Follow me and we shall see!
Living in darkness is their art, see them cawling, with no heart.
Loss for words, I'll say! Why won't they just go away.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I kill them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

This is the end of this song. Hoping now, I'm not wrong.
Insane is as insane does. Is it me, the one who loves?
Flying high, they have wings. All I say is what are these things.
What I've said, and what I've done. Fighting them with no sun.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I slay them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

I see them all, in the darkness...
Their eyes glow red, from the pain....

Killing them I have no ga-a-ain...
...Oh...

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This is living these are the dead, I see them walking in my head.
Try to remember what I've said, their brains are filled with lead.
This could be good change for us? The end of greed, power, and lust.
Listen closely to what I say, all these things won't go away.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I kill them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

Judgement day, appealing to me. When it comes, I'll be free!
No more hate, in the cree. Follow me and we shall see!
Living in darkness is their art, see them cawling, with no heart.
Loss for words, I'll say! Why won't they just go away.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I kill them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

This is the end of this song. Hoping now, I'm not wrong.
Insane is as insane does. Is it me, the one who loves?
Flying high, they have wings. All I say is what are these things.
What I've said, and what I've done. Fighting them with no sun.

This is the rise, this is the fall.
Watch me now as I slay them all.
The Children will Rise, the damned will fall.
In the blink of an eye, you'll see it all.

I see them all, in the darkness...
Their eyes glow red, from the pain....

Killing them I have no ga-a-ain...
...Oh...

wow, not bad, i would totally buy it

nice job

Its scary , why talk about death , ?

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