I have a new song for everyone to critique today, any volunteers :) ?

Question:

I have a new song for everyone to critique today, any volunteers :) ?

http://www.myspace.com/theskyespectacula...

The song I want critiqued today is "What Would She Say?". Do you like it, love it, hate it, and why, that sort of thing. This is the short version of the song, I just cut it because it just repeats the lyrics. But also, if you haven't critiqued "Nicole's Song", feel free to critique that as well! Thank you all so much!

Joel

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The beginning tune is a bit annoying.. far too repetitive.. might want to shorten that part a bit or maybe variate the tunes more. The lyrics are okay, but the vocals need a bit of work. Not a horrible song overall but could use some alterations.