What do you think of my poetry?? ((lost child))?

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What do you think of my poetry?? ((lost child))?

my heart has an ampty space ...and a dark place where love abanded it ..and hatred landed on it....i have kept pressing it to stop ...i need to breathe i can no longer feel...nor hear....just like a ghost ...or a corpse but who cares i am not real!!! without you i'm not and will never be....give me power..give me strengh... i need you ....i'm craving to meet you , is it too much to ask you..to be with me..to guide me..and most of all to have me as the child you never had, money i don't care , only your kindness i do ..give me a chance let me know you ..let me hold your arms i'm your son i mean no harm...if you could read the words coming from my heart you would know you kept it alive...with your shining light!!

i never wrote poetry in a looooong time so ya be easy on me lol ^_^ thank you hope you enjoy it

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2 weeks ago
lol guys i don't feel offended or anything i never wrote in a long time so it's ok ^_^ plus ppl learn from their mistakes and i'm a better writer in arabic anyway but i left it for a while too so ya i suck now lolz ;D
for ppl who loved it thank you so much but i really support the one's that didn't i need practice thanks for the advice .
Mega thanks i like honest ppl lol don't worry i get you ^_^

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 2 weeks ago
lol guys i don't feel offended or anything i never wrote in a long time so it's ok ^_^ plus ppl learn from their mistakes and i'm a better writer in arabic anyway but i left it for a while too so ya i suck now lolz ;D
for ppl who loved it thank you so much but i really support the one's that didn't i need practice thanks for the advice .
Mega thanks i like honest ppl lol don't worry i get you ^_^